Post #7
Sitting on the rough rocks,
The harsh wind blows by...
Seeing his love and longing,
The sky too cries...
-Fatima
P.S: This time I thought of just summing up all the feelings that Mayank is going through just in some four lines, a new experiment for me...I thought of 55 words fiction but settled for this. The shorter the sweeter..do give in your valuable views :)
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short precise and super beautiful lines....loved it...
ReplyDeletehey dear,its beautifulllll and meaningful and the same time...
ReplyDeleteLove the last line:):)
Take care:):)
Seeing his love and longing, the sky too cries.
ReplyDeleteAh, touching.
Great,
*Thumps up*
Have a great week ahead.
short and beautiful...loved it!!
ReplyDelete@ Vaisakhi: Thanks a lot dear...glad you liked it :)
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@ the other side of me: Hey thanks a lot dear...glad you liked it and found it meaningful too!
ReplyDeleteAnd even I'm in love with the last line :)
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@ Hamza: Hey, glad you liked the verses and found them touching :)
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@ Ria: Thanks a lot dear :)
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very touching :)
ReplyDeletefew words and you have created the magic of love :)
ReplyDeletewe always associate the rains as cries, according the emotions we are going through...but the same raindrops are loving to, just have to wait the harsh wind to pass by...
short poem but with big emotions...wonderfully written 4 line...keep posting and consider changing your template for a sec I though there was nothing in ur blog
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Simple yet beautiful words.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
How amazing it is that not people but the elements of nature (like here it's sky)are the one's we relate to when heartfelt feelings are to be expressed through words.
ReplyDeleteNice One Fatima :-)
U dont need 55words only these poetic, insightful lines are enough to convey the message.....Lovely composition ))
ReplyDeleteSimply Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteSometime few words are enough to express.
And you did it brilliantly.
keep it up :)
take care
lovely lines and i loved them
ReplyDeleteBut why does the sky have to cry .. why cant something happen to make sure the longing goes away a miracle :)
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Your number is (49)
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very beautiful...
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Simple and superb Fama :D
ReplyDeleteAnother beautiful poem ... you summed it so well !!!
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