Monday, January 17, 2011

Kuch Alfaz !

This time round I'm feeling like letting out my poetic side in Urdu come out...so here are some shayri's by me...
Please give me your honest reviews if at all you like them, many people don't like work written in Urdu....Hope it turns out to be false :)

These are three different shayri's written during different phases of my life and all of them signify a lot to me....not mere work but something much more than that !

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Tod k vaade tum yun gayee,
   Jazbaaton ko bhi saath le gayee,
   Na aah nikli, na ek aasu baha;
   Aisi tum tanhayee de gayee.....

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 Uss chahat ko hum chahat ka naam kaise de...??...
   Jisse hum chahkar bhi chaah nahi sakte...

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 Tanha hai lekin iss tanhayee mein bhi tera saath hai,
   Sitaaron se jagmagati yeh kaali raat hai,
   Na manzil hai na thekana ai humsafar...
   Lekin iss matlabi duniya mein phir bhi tumhara saath hai. 

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-Fatima

16 comments:

  1. OMG.. why so emotional? kya hua? everything fine naa...

    Beautifully written though...

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  2. @ Divya: yeah di I'm ok now...but I was not when I had written these...I finally had the courage to put these on blog !

    Glad that you liked them :)

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  3. Oh My God ! So emotional ?
    SOmething was seriously wrong... but wonderful words...
    !

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  4. aapke kuch alfaaz bahut kuch keh jaate hai.....srsly........wonderfully written...:)

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  5. @ Arundhati: Yeah emotional...it was seriously wrong so much so that, you know right your current post...that's what happened.

    Glad at least you liked them :)

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  6. @ Apeksha: Shukriya !!! Glad you liked it :)

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  7. Tera saath ho,
    aur kaali ye raat ho,
    kam se kam ye doori rahe,
    tu itna mere pass ho...
    Amazing fatima.. Honest words, and no way i do like urdu hindi poetry.. Even used to write years ago.. Nowadays don't have grip over language much, maybe coz haven't been reading much nowadays. Great work, do write more alike this and don't be shy to put it up.

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  8. Hey, Hi
    i liked the first one, its really nice...

    alfaaz kabhi kuch keh jaate hain,
    jazbaat nahi toh halaat suna jaate hain...
    yahi silsila hai inka,
    kabhi dard to kabhi tanhayee, yeh le jaate hain...

    Regards,
    The Silhouette...

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  9. Hi Fatima,

    Nice to see some of your post after a while.

    Aap to cha gaye. .sachh mein. .I really like the freedom and emotional connect the flow of +ve vibes. .from your shayari... just like. .. its touches hearts... and feel just like a man who is trapped in water and feel the warmth from shining moon.

    lovely.

    take care
    ks
    vivek..

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  10. @ Deepika: Beautiful words...And I'm sure you'll write beautiful even in Urdu coz you have a way with words gal !

    Thanks for the honest appreciation and glad you liked them.

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  11. @ The Silhouette: Hey, the words you penned down were brilliant...at times I'm so lost that I end up writing stuff and times like today, when I want to write something I'm unable too...

    Glad you liked it!

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  12. @ Vivek Chamoli: Yeah but its not that late also..just a few weeks as it is..this was written some time back..just didn't publish it!

    Thanks for you kind words and glad that you liked them and drew some +veness from them at the end.

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  13. pehli aur doosri shayari behad achhi hai,
    teesri shayari mein 'tera saath hai' do baar ane se wo baat nahi rahi.

    This was all about the honest review, nice post nevertheless.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  14. @ Blasphemous Aesthete: For me too the first and second have higher precision over third..actually second is more closer to me...

    I tried to put something else instead of "tera saath hai" yet I couldn't find anything appropriate at that time and till today hence, that line!

    Glad you liked them and thanks for the honest review..that's what matters in the end!

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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  15. well put up , I am a huge fan of Allama Iqbal , wen it comes to verses no one can beat him..try reading him..i m sure u ll love it too :)

    PS : u have got a nice blog out here , loved the purple template..keep blogging :D

    sarah

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  16. @ subtlescribbler: I've heard a lot about Allama Iqbal from my mom but never tried giving his works a try, just know one song by him "Lab Pe Aati Hai Dua" and I love it and I'm surely looking forward to read verses by him. Thanks a lot for the info!

    Well glad that you visited my blog and liked it, thanks a lot :)

    Take Care,
    Fatima

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