Saturday, November 12, 2011

Walk Beyond Oblivion....

 Walk Beyond Oblivion....

There are moments when somethings on my mind but I just can't rhyme,
So forgive me these few brief awkward lines,
 
You're the only one now left,
Who I don't really wanna lose,
Though I know I can be too childish at times,
Or my words too sarcastic to digest for you...
But I ain't the one with attitude who can't change,
It's just I'm needy and too hurt that I can't bear,
And all I want from you is just a bit of love and care...

Gifts and pleasures I don't long,
As your friendship has been my greatest treasure all along.


-Fatima
P.S: Dedicated to my Soul Searched Friend.
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14 comments:

  1. AlcinaSaturday, November 12, 2011 11:36:00 PM

    To be there through thick and thin..
    Caressing the tattering soul and healing just in time..
    Through space and unending universe omnipresent the friend by your side!

    Gripped in charismatic box(words) of patient longing and with the determination to never let loose..

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  2. Someone is SpecialSunday, November 13, 2011 1:15:00 AM

    Fatima, soulful and beautiful.. and the last two lines are too good..

    Someone is Special

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  3. Rachana ShakyawarSunday, November 13, 2011 1:28:00 AM

    So touching..I almost got goosebumps while reading it :))
    ~ Keep the Spark Alive..

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  4. AnonymousSunday, November 13, 2011 11:34:00 AM

    Its not important words to rhyme always,its when they don't yet to the one written for understands it perfectly :) Its gonna be alright girl, take care and hugs :)

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  5. Vijeta BiradarSunday, November 13, 2011 1:09:00 PM

    The last two lines are like- Wow!! Lovely lines! :-)

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  6. ⁂ܓVållῐ ⁂ܓ☺Monday, November 14, 2011 11:09:00 AM

    It's not necessary that every poem should rhyme...

    You've poured your heart in these words....Good work dear

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  7. Manisha BhatiaMonday, November 14, 2011 12:40:00 PM

    Its straight out f heart!!
    N trust me its beautiful!!

    Lost f love n God Bless U!!

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  8. RiàTuesday, November 15, 2011 3:27:00 PM

    That was beautiful, hope ur friend has read this.

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  9. anonblogTuesday, November 15, 2011 6:16:00 PM

    good post, supported!

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  10. BikramTuesday, November 15, 2011 7:30:00 PM

    its beautiful and Friendship is a blisss and sacreddddddd :)


    Bikram's

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  11. Ritz..Tuesday, November 15, 2011 8:13:00 PM

    It made me smile... Such simple and beautiful lines .... loved it :)

    Ritz.
    www.delectableflavors.blogspot.com

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  12. Ritz..Tuesday, November 15, 2011 8:15:00 PM

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  13. Beyond HorizonWednesday, November 16, 2011 7:22:00 PM

    This is YOU! ;)

    Lines need not rhyme, words make them beautiful :)

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  14. deepsSaturday, November 19, 2011 5:09:00 PM

    hopefully ur friend comes across this one :)

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