Crossed Paths.....
Untold unexpressed emotions lead her to a dark alley where stark silence lingers and the shadow seems to fade, a confused numb pain takes over her as she tries to elude and sever the past. Knocking every door on her way hoping to see her beloved's face only to realize he's gone too far away.
-Fatima
P.S: My first ever attempt at writing a 55 words fiction..dunno how it has come out...do leave your views :)
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Sad 55... and a beautiful attempt on Fiction 55.. You are rocking..
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nice attempt on 55 word fiction....n yes its sad n beautiful...sply aftr listnin to ur version of intrprtatn..:)
ReplyDeletegood one, touche!!
ReplyDeleteWonderful dear:)
ReplyDeleteAwwww! its touching to heart. love it. I like simplicity of ur blog. Going to follow it.
ReplyDeleteNice attempt at 55 word fiction!
ReplyDeleteEmotions well conveyed:)
ReplyDeleteConcise profoundness, that's that! And well, impressive first attempt! (;
Cheers!
With every realization develop a hope, a strength to pass through those dark alleys again, to walk not as a stranger but one with the courage to arouse hope in others who will pass that way :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful Fatima!
Wow. This whole and perfect!
ReplyDeleteHey, Hi
ReplyDeletewell, honestly, for it being your first attempt at 55fiction, its pretty good...for 55fiction aint easy to weave...
nice...keep writing..
:)
Regards,
Eon Heath...
A wonderful piece you have weaved :) :) So dearly, so lovingly :)
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so so so beautiful poem...have some mercy u lovely wordsmith dont make me go head over heels....
ReplyDeleteLove, pain,longing...just in few words...Nice :)
ReplyDeletevery nice... much impressed..I liked it.. continue these..small ones are the toughest..as it limits one.. but u have done a good job dear.
ReplyDeleteSo profound...so beautiful!!
ReplyDeletesometimes 1000 words does not say what it was meant to say and sometimes mere 55 words can say it all........I think you should continue to write more fiction
ReplyDeletegood luck with that...
Your 55 first time attempt is nice..but i am just left wondering by this and grateful to know from you that not only stories which are like tell tale become 55-fiction but also these emotional pain..
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Hey its lovely..love the emotional pain
ReplyDeletekeep up the good work
Ramadhan mubarak =D
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deep and nyyyyyyyyyyyyyce:-)
ReplyDelete@ SIS: Sad but I liked it that way..glad you liked it :)
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@ Vaisakhi: Glad you liked it dear :)
ReplyDeleteBut it can be interpreted in any way depends on the readers perspective !
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@ Muddasir: Thanks a lot...glad you liked it :)
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@ Neeha: Long time, how are you doing ??
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it dear.
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@ Aiman: Glad you liked the post and the blog!
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my blog...
Do keep visiting, it was a pleasure having you here :)
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@ tarunima: Thanks a lot...glad you liked it :)
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